User blog comment:Akatosh the Dragon god of time/Sotteta's Alt ending/@comment-3293219-20150525192044

I think that this is a nice piece but I've noticed a few issues. The first was that the character's name was 'Kariah,' not 'Kira.' XD

My second issue is the fact that you use the word 'dagger' 4 times in one sentence, I'd propose using a synonym, like...

"Tears went down her cheeks and onto the cold hard ground, Sotteta slowly got her steel dagger out and pointed it at her neck she put the blade close to her neck but before she stab her neck she dropped the weapon on the ground."

Using different words or just referring to the dagger as 'it' can improve the flow of a sentence, amongst other things.

Other than that, I feel like it was a good piece. :)